Following me

is an Eastern Phoebe with its harsh, emphatic “fee-be fee-be.”

It scares me silly

because it’s how my angry Mum would rasp my name,

“Patricia.”

In fact, she used it only WHEN she was mad.

(As a result I do so love people who sweetly call me “Patricia.”)

So, this Phoebe;

is it you, Mum?

Following me?*

PATTY

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*And now, I must ask why is she following? To make me think about her? And to ponder if I am being too stern about her? More later, as they say. (These asterisk words are outside the bounds of my 50 word story!! But, mayhap, they be a continuation of said story?)

2 thoughts on “A Fifty Word Story for the Weekly Writing Challenge. A juxtapositioning of my Mum and a bird again. Sigh. (http://dailypost.wordpress.com/dp_writing_challenge/fifty/)

  1. I love this, Patty, and how nostalgia comes at us out of nowhere, which is what touched me the most. Interesting questions as to why she might be following you(maybe even contritely) that might lead to another poem.

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